Monday, 17 June 2019
Creative Writing
In the village there was some moari people there were males and females the males has a light Taiaha in a few weeks there was going to be a war with the moari people different tribes so they were training for the battle. Two week later, one more week left. We need to train for this battle a week has been it's time for the battle lets hide in the bush and when they get close we ambush them they were doing the same thing and they seen us go in the bush ahhhhh they are here run back to the village we need to upgrade to a Taiaha laze. After four weeks they have came and raided us we went and garbed or Taiaha and we frighted back and we won we have to go to there village and take their food and water. Its was cold when night came we made a fire then we sleeped outside on that night I looked into the sky and I seen Matariki.
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Hi Nice story line Maybe, you could Make it more cultural like how it says village maybe you could change it to maraea, and change some words as it dose not make sense really other wise sounds like a great story.
ReplyDeleteGreat story Tuks maybe next time add more details and what happend in between those weeks and maybe next time take the bit out where it says we need to tarin for the battle because you kinda said the same thing in the line before other then that great story.
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